研究 - 放下與接受 - 淺論英文寫作

[grc45]

聆聽外語的節奏與發音，進而掌握該語言的特有腔調是很重要的，您要客觀地融入該主流社會的文化精華篇；而非那些以主觀意識來論述（這點自己是無法察覺的，要靠當地人來調教），比方說，本人當年剛到加拿大時，在入學前的一篇鑑別寫作能力的短文中，題目是很容易發揮的「第一夫人的角色」，文章是得了個40/40=100% (Content:10/10; Grammar:10/10; Spelling:10/10; Style:10/10)教授給的評語(Comments)為︰

- Good manipulation of grammar.
- Great use of transitions!
- Good paragraph structure.
- Good use of articles and capitals.
- You have presented a strong opinion - good work!

這些我都記憶猶新，可是，Erica 她說（德國裔的教授,加拿大的第三代）︰這雖然是寫的很好，但是語氣卻完全非本地的（意指是外國人的寫法）；她說︰要多揣摩本地的字彙運用，因為在寫作的時候要讓人起共鳴，就非要用本地的敘述方式才行，這也就是所謂「入境隨俗」。她又說︰你可以將文章拿去讓其他人下評語（加拿大人），這是篇典型的東方型敘述。要儘快的轉換過來，這樣才能讓你被大家接受，否則，文章寫的再好，也是篇很外國化的非主流語文；就像很多的具英文背景的加拿大本地印度英文報紙所給人的強烈語氣似的，所以這點要絕對避免的，假如你想真正的適應本地環境乃至於有良好發展的話，這些一定要改正過來﹗


當時的我很不是滋味，後來才知道她的要求是對的，在往後寫作上，她就要我特別的注意到主流社會的媒體，如電視，廣播與報紙新聞等。當年僅24歲就跳級取得碩士學位的她（很漂亮，身材178公分，藍眼珠，很迷人﹗），對我有著不同於一般人的教授方法，因為我喜歡問，她就知道我的盲點在哪，所以她就特別喜歡出難題給我練習。她說︰加拿大的主流報紙 - 環球郵報 (Global and Mail) http://www.theglobeandmail.com/ 是她最為推薦的頂級英文學習主流報紙，聽力不妨借助 CNN 的電視報導(學習語言），加拿大的國家廣播公司 - CBS （學習聽力）也都是上選。就這樣才擺脫了她所點明的中式論述。


該文稿還在我的軟磁碟 floppy disk 中，我經常拿出來回味，現在貼上來獻醜︰


The Role of the First Lady

The position of the First Lady is very unique. She has to act in many roles to fulfill various challenges, so responsibility and patience are essential.

By definition, the First Lady is the most important person next to the president. She is not only the President's wife and her children's mother, but also an obvious role model to the public. Any action performed by her could deeply affect nature itself. A positive performance is critical.

Being a First Lady is a very difficult task in many ways. First of all, she has to deal with family chores, such as taking care of her kids' education and health.

Secondly, she has to work with her husband and coordinate the President's schedule with almost every important event. Her considerate support is essential. She has to backup the President's decision to gain the whole nation's recognition.

Finally, she has to keep herself as wise as possible because any unwise and inapproapriate conversation may damage her husband's reputation.

Nevertheless, the First Lady should make every effort to associate with every issue in the country. Since the First Lady is assuming fantastic responsibilities, her full support is absolutely necessary.

Thanks for those wingless Angeles.

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時隔20年後的原題重新改寫
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The role of the First Lady is an ever changing position that is constantly redefined by each woman who holds the title. As a result, it is difficult to determine if the First Lady is expected to perform certain duties and behave in a particular way. Despite this uncertainty, it is widely assumed that the role of the First Lady should be a combination of domestic duties and political responsibilities. As the wife of the President, the First Lady is expected to be a gracious hostess, as well as a dominant political figure. Above all, the First Lady needs to be an advocate for important social issues.


The First Lady should have the authority to decide on policy, and to make her own contributions to the country. For instance, Hillary Clinton embraced the role of a political and social advocate when she took it upon herself to reorganize the American health care system. In order to be successful advocate, as well as an advisor to her husband, the First Lady needs to be highly educated, naturally intelligent, and well spoken. Without these qualities, the First Lady cannot deliver the speeches and political campaigns that will ensure that her point of views is heard and respected by the American people. In short, the First Lady needs to an intelligent, personable, and flexible individual who is capable of balancing political and domestic responsibilities.

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作者: barrielee

還一點小意見

作文語言技巧運用很重要,可是現代的學生不愛閱讀,腦袋空空,不要說英文寫作,中文作文都不能言之有物

小弟文筆不好,靠大量閱讀關注時事,社會各項資訊來充實自己,腦海泉源不致空泛,大學時代作文常靠與眾不同受老師關注

老師教導同一個題目寫了一千字,哪怕文法錯一半,總好過全沒錯誤卻寫不出二百字,因此技術上問題可以慢慢修正,沒有資料再換幾個題目還是寫不出有內涵的作文

個人的見解是g兄的第一夫人的角色,內容平鋪直述沒有犯任何毛病,因為要用來檢定就不需太大要求,如果是考試題目跟其他人比較,就欠缺力度

美國人喜歡舉例,如果是我的構想,會舉些例子如~老布希的太太Barbra像祖母型,Cilton的太太Hilary女強人型,現任第一夫人米雪兒..各有不同風格,因此,文章的結論是"The role of the first lady is to be her own master"做自己的主人無需被任何相夫教子的枷鎖框著(不止語法,這是美國老師的指導要學習美國人的思維寫出來的東西就比較不像中式英文)

Barrie 大所言甚是，要寫得好就要多閱讀，現代人的寫作是在激烈的往後退，求職只要看 resume 寫的如何是沒有用的，那有可能是請人代筆的，只要來個當場臨機小寫作，隨便提個作文題目，肯定馬上見真章。

綠色部份的確是欠缺力度的，因為題目是第一夫人的角色，談的是她們連國會乃至於憲法都沒規範的額外無薪職責，她們家事、國事兩肩扛，所以就只能在談她們的辛苦、奉獻與謹言慎行的典範上予以敘述；假若用五分鐘以上的時間，來寫一篇 Comparison and Contrast Essay 的話，那還算公平，因為可分別以兩個反差很大的比較文章來寫，那麼題目應該如︰The different style of First Lady，較為適合。


我們的觀念來自出生後的背景，想法與邏輯自成一格，換句話說，老外到國內要寫出我們常用的中文，那也是很難的，除非他同時接受雙語教育，而且要真正的融入我國的生活環境，而不是身在國外。


我身處國外，對國內的很多新文化，因為在國內可能是藝人或某節目中某名人提出一個標新立異的非傳統名詞，那麼在海外無法接觸到此一資訊的我，就根本無法理解，像什麼小白；白目等等都是好例子，看的都很辛苦，所以有人會認為我的寫法有時像大陸或香港的口氣，這就是無奈的地方，一旦所有的資訊都是他們的，在海外台灣的聲音都被大陸大大的掩蓋掉了﹗


還有，就算網路有多發達與方便，投資所有時間，整天死守在電腦上網聊天，在接觸文化上，也未必能勝過真正的待在國內的方便。個人如此，那麼那些連背景都不同或根本都沒有的外國人，在台灣若寫出的中文不會半調子嗎？


相對的，我們如不極度的接觸外國文化，那麼寫出來的文章就會如同我在1988年所硬擠出來的文章一樣，對他們來說，這並不是篇當地文，而是中國思維文，死板而無生趣，哪怕是得個40/40=100%，那還是篇不成功的文章。


或許大家有興趣，可以把我那死板文給重寫一次，看能否寫得生動自然些。今天特別打電話找到 Erica，她說︰There is nothing incorrect! Says that everyone has unique for something, but there are still something unique above uniques. When we talking about the First Lady, she maybe unique for certain things, but there are somthing more or specially unique than others.

作者: 猜謎人

very是副詞

副詞修飾
動詞形容詞和副詞

抱歉﹗早上趕著出門來不及用中文輸入，所以只能用英文輸入，還望海涵﹗

猜大所提出的是正確的，下列的說明可以證明︰

Adverbs:

An adverb modifies a verb, adjective or another adverbs. Adverbs tell: how, when, where and how much.

[grc45]

經由早上的電話聯繫，知道 Erica 教授已訂婚了，她的未婚夫在多倫多的韓國現代車代理商任 Auto Service Advisor，她對韓國現代車很滿意，滿意的結果並非是她未婚夫能以員工優惠價購買（78％），據她的十個月的使用經驗，認為跟日本車一樣的好開；明年初準備結婚，她未婚夫來自美國德州，具體地點還未聊到，想到多明尼加渡蜜月。

[grc45]

看到小Q就如增新兵百萬，感謝您的奉獻與支持﹗

[qdenise]

借某位老爺爺的話一用：

一堆蚯蚓文…挖跨某啦

沒有貢獻…只能送花

[猜謎人]

作者: qdenise

借某位老爺爺的話一用：

一堆蚯蚓文…挖跨某啦

沒有貢獻…只能送花

賣假

[atie]

我只要能全看得懂就行了

[Living]

加拿大可能比較重文法

在美國, 英文早就沒有文法可言

WE DON'T GOT NO MONEY 這種亂七八糟語法早已是不分黑白, 各種族都能接受的標準英文

[猜謎人]

作者: Living

加拿大可能比較重文法

在美國, 英文早就沒有文法可言

WE DON'T GOT NO MONEY 這種亂七八糟語法早已是不分黑白, 各種族都能接受的標準英文

否定的否定是肯定

[Living]

作者: 猜謎人

否定的否定是肯定

ㄟ...結果是說"沒錢"

[atie]

作者: Living

ㄟ...結果是說"沒錢"

那直接講「no money」不是更簡單

[猜謎人]

作者: atie

那直接講「no money」不是更簡單

No money! No talk!

[atie]

one-way

和

single way

在用語上有什麼不同的地方?!

又或者兩種都是同一意思呢?!

事情是發生朋友身上

只是要搭車到某一個地方和朋友會合

一個說單程是one-way

另一個說「你的英文真爛」是single way才對

個人是覺得兩個都應該是可以都可以啦

所以...............不得不當裁判的我 來問問版上英文厲害之高手高高手

[grc45]

作者: atie

one-way

和

single way

在用語上有什麼不同的地方?!

又或者兩種都是同一意思呢?!

事情是發生朋友身上

只是要搭車到某一個地方和朋友會合

一個說單程是one-way

另一個說「你的英文真爛」是single way才對

個人是覺得兩個都應該是可以都可以啦

所以...............不得不當裁判的我 來問問版上英文厲害之高手高高手

one-way 是單向的，單程的，單行道的意思；single 在英國也當單程解，如單程車票或機票等，不過 single 與 alone 是同義字；前者較為通用。

[grc45]

現把二十年前的原文，來個沈澱式的重寫；其中或有瑕疵，請先進們不吝指教﹗

這將會是入境隨俗的論述方法，同時參考 Barrie 兄的意見，就把 克林頓 的老婆 喜拉利 拉下水。


The role of the First Lady is an ever changing position that is constantly redefined by each woman who holds the title. As a result, it is difficult to determine if the First Lady is expected to perform certain duties and behave in a particular way. Despite this uncertainty, it is widely assumed that the role of the First Lady should be a combination of domestic duties and political responsibilities. As the wife of the President, the First Lady is expected to be a gracious hostess, as well as a dominant political figure. Above all, the First Lady needs to be an advocate for important social issues.


The First Lady should have the authority to decide on policy, and to make her own contributions to the country. For instance, Hillary Clinton embraced the role of a political and social advocate when she took it upon herself to reorganize the American health care system. In order to be successful advocate, as well as an advisor to her husband, the First Lady needs to be highly educated, naturally intelligent, and well spoken. Without these qualities, the First Lady cannot deliver the speeches and political campaigns that will ensure that her point of views is heard and respected by the American people. In short, the First Lady needs to an intelligent, personable, and flexible individual who is capable of balancing political and domestic responsibilities.

[grc45]

作者: qdenise

借某位老爺爺的話一用：

一堆蚯蚓文…挖跨某啦

沒有貢獻…只能送花

哇，真不好意思﹗前陣子在聖誕節猛趕發員工道賀信（非制式文而是以各人狀況，各發一信予以特別的親筆書寫寄發），所以錯過了 小Q 的這段回覆。事實上，面對貴校的龐大菁英與社會貢獻，個人認為 denise 是太過謙虛了，能有機會互相切磋才是大家的福氣﹗

有點遺憾的是個人的時間越來越緊了，再也無法像以前一樣的逐一道賀，還請大家多海涵~